| #1 Feanor[163695] |
| urz-p520.rz.uni-jena.de |
Hi again, Im finally finished with this thing... it took a long time till I execpted that it cant be proofread without a full rewrite of the corrector. So it has to stay like this...
If you think, you actually could correct my work WITHOUT rewriting it totally, please contact me via the forum. Thanks.
I also noticed that little questionmarksigns appeared in all my reports, where normaly other signs should be. It only happens when I view the reports at BR.com and not when I open them from my harddrive. Does somebody know why this is happening and how I can fix it? Could it be because Im using the german keyboard layout?
Greetz to all,
and write reports!!!
Feanor
PS.: Is there anybody who dont has the Arial Rounded MT Bold font? I would up it if you like... |
#2  [163701] |
| user-0ce2kp9.cable.mindspring.com |
| Approved! |
| #3 [163702] |
| user-0ce2kp9.cable.mindspring.com |
| Oops...well, let's keep that 10 until after I've read it =P |
#4  [163703] |
| 71.196.133.211 |
| gw DD you newb |
| #5 NewbEye[163704] |
| dp-216-106-106-192.storm.ca |
I've been waiting a while for this instalment of this series. The storyline is moving along quite nicely, and there was a surprising (at least to me) plot twist in this edition.
I still think the words-to-pictures ratio is too low, and there are pictures that serve little purpose. But if that's your style, don't let me stop you. Also, the typos (there were quite a few of them) and weird ways you use English were distracting. I thought you got someone to proofread for you?
Also, if you're going to put explanatory text like "orange is JC's thoughts" it might help if you put them at the beginning of the report, rather than the end :)
Despite these shortcomings, it was enjoyable. The plot flowed pretty smoothly, and I wasn't lost by any of the game-specific vocabulary.
Regarding your "question mark" problems, it seems fine to me. You might want to set your browser to the Western ISO-8859-1 character set, though I don't know how that might affect the German sites you visit...
I'm looking forward to the next DX report. Maybe you'll have screenshots of "secret doors" in the women's restrooms? |
| #6 Psyonic_Reaver[163705] |
| 67-59-78-62.generic.webformix.com |
| I like it Feanor. Keep up the good work! Keep finding more of those look for the boat pictures too. =p |
| #7 Convider[163710] |
| toronto-HSE-ppp4110710.sympatico.ca |
| I enjoyed it, but there were really too many spelling/grammar errors. Just a quick proofread would have helped immensely, you wouldn't have to rewrite it. I would say high 8 to low 9... |
| #8 dust[163711] |
| bbcache-10.singnet.com.sg |
| Please kill Gunther the fun way. |
#9  [163713] |
| user-12l2ep3.cable.mindspring.com |
| Wow looks great. Meaty report fit for a 4th of july dinner! |
| #10 all-fear[163714] |
| Quebec-HSE-ppp3618717.sympatico.ca |
| looks nice |
| #11 Feanor[163720] |
| urz-p515.rz.uni-jena.de |
Thank you all for the nice words, but it would be cool if the raters would rate instead of just commenting... :)
@Newb
You are right, I had a proofreader but he decided that he could only do the job if he rewrites the whole thing and that wasnt something we both wanted.
And to the explanatory stuff... I like to keep the beginning of my reports clear of "explanatory" stuff. It shouldnt be so hard to find out what that orange stuff was btw...
About the secret doors... Are there some in Hongkong? I can remember any right now...
@Psyonic
I have more funny things, but they are mainly animated gif and maybe to large to fit into my reportcenter acount in greater numbers.
@dust
If you know the game, you should already know, how I will kill Gunter --> Jamie Rayes....
PS.: Just to make sure noone is wondering: This is NOT my story, I just retell the story of Deus Ex. |
| #12 [163721] |
| user-0ce2kp9.cable.mindspring.com |
| I promise I'll rate this when I'm awake enough to tell words apart. I need to get a full night's sleep first, though. |
| #13 [163733] |
| user-0ce2kp9.cable.mindspring.com |
Only two things I really want to say, and they've been said before. Proofreader, which you said you still need, so we'll let it slide, and secondly too many pictures of hallways and such. You said the pic amount was your style, so I guess we'll have to agree to disagree on that point...
Oh, and there was one bit with the orange text interspersed with italics, and I was under the impression that it was all thoughts, until the orange text showed up. Wasn't sure what you were going for there.
8 from me. |
| #14 Decay[163853] |
| 250-56.69-92-cpe.cableone.net |
| Wow, this is quite impressive. As others have said, spelling mistakes and such were a bit distracting, but still a great report overall. Nicely done! More please! |
| #15 mattzrella[163858] |
| 96.5.33.65.cfl.res.rr.com |
i looked at the single rating and 13 comments and assumed that the report would be a waste of time... little did i know this was a amssive report and you obviously put a TON of effort into it. kudos just for that, man
i only read about halfway but i have to go to work in half an hour. it was good up to that point, but im not very familiar with the game. keep up the reporting though |
| #16 Feanor[164444] |
| p548378A1.dip.t-dialin.net |
| Thanks to all of you for the kind words, I wasnt to sure if I really wanted to continue to write till I read them... |
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