| #1 Feanor[163322] |
| urz-p522.rz.uni-jena.de |
I just saw that only IE displays the alt-texts... any helf on solving that problem would be greatly apprciated.
Thanks in advance. |
| #2 Feanor[163323] |
| urz-p522.rz.uni-jena.de |
| helf = help ... stupid me |
| #3 micro[163324] |
| cache-rtc-ab04.proxy.aol.com |
replace the "alt" code with the word "title" and all browsers should be able to read the alt-text. simple.
also, 1st non author post before the report is shown :o |
| #4 DD[163325] |
| dhcp04605.highsouth-resnet.unc.edu |
| Wow you're cranking these out fast...wish I was rater so I could read this :D |
| #5 Samurai Toast[163327] |
| cache-ntc-aa07.proxy.aol.com |
yeah, hurry up and rate the damn report!
First part was great. Awesome report on an awesome game. Even the sequel was fun, though it lacked some of the open-ended aspect.
Pick up Deus Ex and Deus Ex: Invisible War if you can find 'em. Good stuff.
Mark my words: I see great things in Feanor's reporting future.
Now, if only Drefsab would start reporting again.. |
#6  [163328] |
| 71.196.133.211 |
| Yeah, rate the damn report you noobs!! |
| #7 Convider[163329] |
| 74.12.121.184 |
Just as good as the first one, but the pictures are still a bit dark imo.
9ish |
| #8 NewbEye[163331] |
| dp-216-106-106-186.storm.ca |
Another good effort. The pictures were a tad better this time, with a little more action. The ones where you're aiming for headshots were amusing, and the one where you're sort of aiming for the crotch is... dirty!
My complaint would be that the words-to-picture ratio is too low. Perhaps resizing the pictures or writing more might help?
And...
"Hey idiots, threat is coming from the outside...turn around"
Heh. |
#9  [163333] |
| user-12l2ep3.cable.mindspring.com |
Ack no ratings yet? Hrmmph looks like we need some new raters me thinks!
I give it a 9, spectacular presentation on an under-reported game, nice writing and pics. Good job man. |
#10  [163336] |
| usrns22.dialup.hawaii.edu |
| Same day rating? You're getting spoiled now aren't you JV? =) |
| #11 [163337] |
| 71.196.133.211 |
I found this about as entertaining as the last one, but the problems I neglected to mention reared their ugly head.
First: you need someone to spellcheck for you. Posting on the forums should get you somebody. Second: you need to decide who's doing the talking. You did a nice job of seperating the 'game information' from narrative, but if it's a first person story you should be writing about what the character thinks.
Example: CONSPIRACY! Tell about what JCDenton is thinking. Just a suggestion.
Anyways, high 8 and make more. I've started playing this game again because of you. |
| #12 Raider[163339] |
| c-69-255-13-3.hsd1.va.comcast.net |
| Ah lucky--play BW. |
| #13 [163340] |
| user-12l2ep3.cable.mindspring.com |
| Same day rating... ahah I think I got confused between this and his other report since they followed so closely. |
| #14 [163341] |
| user-12l2ep3.cable.mindspring.com |
| I think Lucky's comment of "I've started playing this game again because of you." is a good indicator of a battle report doing its job. |
| #15 Feanor[163344] |
| lws15.rz.uni-jena.de |
Thanks a lot for all these nice words about my work.
@ micro: an easy solution, I will try when I back home, thanks.
@ Samurai T.: I agree, it lacks an open end but I didn't construct on because I was not sure if I wanted to continue reporting. My calculation showed me that I had to write at least another 9, longer reports to cover the whole game.
@ Convider: Hm, they work fine for me... maybe your monitor is set a bit to dark? And well, Deus Ex IS a dark game after all.
@ NewbEye: You are right with that words-picture rating. I will try to improve but I cant promise.
@ LuckyNewbie: I already write in 1st person past and jump to the present from time to time to hopefully add some speed and intensity. So its JC talking, except from the weapon and augmentation descriptions which are my thoughts about them. There are JCs thought inside the reports already, but adding more is a good idea. |
| #16 DD[163345] |
| dhcp04605.highsouth-resnet.unc.edu |
DD for rater!
Agreed about proofreader.
Agreed with NewbEye about your words/pic ratio. Specifically, a lot of "this is where I am" shots can be cropped down or dropped altogether. There were a lot of pics where it's just you looking down a hallway or something. Descriptive writing will serve you well enough in most of those situations. Pics look fine to me in terms of darkness.
You were a little inconsistent, I thought, in using detail during combat. There were some sequences where you really took in the reader with your writing, and others where you glossed over it and threw in a pic or something. Specifically the large collage with the random elf chicks (not to look an elf chick in the boobs, but where did those come from?)
I still feel those present tense stream-of-conciousness bits disturb the flow a little bit, but I guess that's just my own stylistic preference. No one else seems to be complaining ;]
I'd say same solid 8 that I said last time, and that the pic ratio thing and a proofreader would probably pull you up to 9. |
| #17 Feanor[163352] |
| urz-p513.rz.uni-jena.de |
| I just fixed the alt-text issue. Big kudos for micros help. As mentioned in part 1, I added funny RPG things when I could not think of something myself. |
| #18 Feanor[164905] |
| p54834555.dip.t-dialin.net |
| The "elf chicks" can be found at Blizzards Fan Art project... can't remember the exact adress right now but searching on google should give the desired results... |
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