| #1 Sabotage[136503] |
| pool-68-161-56-18.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| Lets hope harder for a gold this time :) |
| #2 kidonfire[136505] |
| 219.94.100.74 |
| 1st non writer... muwaha |
| #3 jimmy[136506] |
| CWPP-p-203-54-206-63.prem.tmns.net.au |
Hey Sabotage!
My thoughts on this:
Much much better than your previous ones. Nice detail, although you'll need to have alt-text.
Another thing:
"The defense award goes to nal_raar for having an awesome defence. "
Doesn't make much sense. However, I loved the idea of the awards. 8.
Very Gj!
-NOTjimmy |
| #4 jimmy[136507] |
| CWPP-p-203-54-206-63.prem.tmns.net.au |
asdf i wanted second
-NJ |
| #5 jimmy[136508] |
| CWPP-p-203-54-206-63.prem.tmns.net.au |
kidonfire, are u an aussie?
-NJ |
| #6 Sabotage[136515] |
| pool-68-161-56-18.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| thanks for the comment |
| #7 jimmy[136516] |
| CWPP-p-203-54-206-63.prem.tmns.net.au |
no prob ;)
-NJ |
| #8 Razoriel[136525] |
| CPE-203-45-76-231.nsw.bigpond.net.au |
I'm not sure about Kidonfire being an Aussie, but I am...
Anyway, some of the text was cut off. Maybe you could avoid doing that in your next report. 7 or 8. |
| #9 2e722[136526] |
| bbcache-233.singnet.com.sg |
| actual 3rd...spammer -.- |
| #10 jimmy[136527] |
| CWPP-p-203-54-206-63.prem.tmns.net.au |
hmm, Razonriel, you are probably only 400 km from where I am right now...
I spam.
-NJ |
| #11 funnymarx[136533] |
| dhcp085244.res-hall.northwestern.edu |
"balls of steel award goes to Flavorofyellow for trying his best and attacking. nal_raar"
What the hell is the once coveted 'balls-'o-steel' award coming to...
--funnymarx
"I should say you were intruding." |
| #12 jimmy[136534] |
| CWPP-p-203-54-206-63.prem.tmns.net.au |
I agree.
-NOTjimmy |
| #13 mick[136535] |
| 1Cust161.tnt9.bne1.da.uu.net |
I winned teh 2 awards :d
why am I Saddam though T_T |
| #14 mick[136536] |
| 1Cust161.tnt9.bne1.da.uu.net |
| i'm an aussie too btw ;o |
| #15 Sabotage[136538] |
| pool-68-161-56-105.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| lol mick. |
| #16 Sabotage[136539] |
| pool-68-161-56-105.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| #11- teal had balls messing with mick |
| #17 [136540] |
| mnet-baca244-13-199.monarch.net |
| gold without a doubt. although the games werent great, and there were some errors, i think havin gtwo games pushes it into gold. gj |
| #18 ZeaI[136541] |
| cache-da02.proxy.aol.com |
| Could be better, but imho, definatly a gold. |
| #19 Lord_Morte[136542] |
| 204.184.41.249 |
As much as I hate to say it, I would disagree.
Your writing style... was choppy. Use more complex and compound sentences, and vary the lengths of sentences a bit more. It got somewhat boring to hear same-sounding simple sentences over and over again.
I agree with #8, some of your text was cut off, which resulted in a bit of confusion for me. It seems, at least to me, that some of the text was actually put behind the pictures. Am I right?
Every sentence starts with a capital letter. Some of yours do not. The Zerg have drones, not probes. Lastly, choose which tense you want to write in, either past or present, or future, if you really want to. Just make sure you stay in it, or it makes your writing look unprofessional.
You're making definate progress, I think. Keep going, and you'll get gold. *nods* |
| #20 LameJoker[136543] |
| ip-209-23-3-113.modem.logical.net |
| yAy, the first game was the best, because the sentences were the best. It seemed like in the second game, you just got tired of proofreading or something. But good job, definitely the most polished one yet. |
| #21 SAbotage[136544] |
| pool-68-161-56-105.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| the first thing i did during daylight. game two i did at 2 in the morning. |
| #22 endersshadow[136549] |
| ool-182d2de6.dyn.optonline.net |
| much better pics this time around sabotage, but your writing still lacks something. Funny report mainly b/c i know both flavorofyellow (aka cowboy_bebop) and zombo_ in real life. o.o |
| #23 Sabotage[136555] |
| pool-68-161-56-105.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| damn whats alt-text. someone tell me. im an idiot! |
| #24 LameJoker[136557] |
| ip-209-23-0-216.modem.logical.net |
-_- Alt-text is the little box of words that pops up when you hold the cursor over a picture.
heh |
| #25 Ender[136558] |
| 128.226.136.208 |
| nice report.. the games could of been better they both lacked suspense.. like someone said the pics covered some of the pics and i thought the awards were pretty weird.. i think mick would of won 1v2 ;] we love the aussie |
| #26 Decay[136560] |
| 206.10.109.84 |
I think you finally got your gold here, even though the pics were still fuzzy. I guess its just your editor. :o
BTW alt text can be added to give humor and such to the report by adding the alt command. If you want alt text for your pic to be "ALT TEXT", then you would have (img "http.www.blahblahpictureblah" alt="ALT TEXT") |
| #27 ZerG~LinG[136561] |
| p402-010.ppp.get2net.dk |
Like Lord Morte and other said, the writing was below average. You clump your pics together and align them like shit, try to space out everything, it's not like you have to cram in the report in such tight spaces, use the <br clear="all"> tag to aviod the text-wrap problems.
Lastly, the games were just uninspiring and just your average bnet game. Take longer time in picking your games, this in turn mkes the report all the better.
6-7 |
| #28 LurkerBurger7[136563] |
| ool-182e1a3b.dyn.optonline.net |
I kinda agree with #19 . You do have to work on your writing style brian but it was definetly better than your other ones.
-_-_-_-_-_-_-_-_-_-7-_-_-_-_-_-_-_-_-_-_- |
| #29 Smeagol[136566] |
| dorset-ext.nt.tas.gov.au |
| Aussie Aussie Aussie Oi Oi Oi!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
| #30 TIMEisnotonYOURSIDE[136570] |
| 12-210-79-86.client.attbi.com |
The report was ok......it was better then ZerG~LinGs. He is a jack off who has no life and just writes boring reports. His name should be GaY~AsS. Look to my reports for inspiration. Or Airplane_Steel, he is an excellent writer.
But what I want you guys to look out for is a new up-and-comer by the name of YellowSnow. He will be dropping his 1st report in a few weeks....and its chilling. He sent me some of his shit, and asked if I could be his mentor, which I heartly agree. Get ready to be amazed. TIME |
| #31 Bladenewbie[136571] |
| tck1-207.interl.net |
I liked it. I did notice the pictures covering some words, and the writing quality did sort of decline in the second game, but everyone told you that. Damn good work, keep it up.
7 |
| #32 ZeaL[136575] |
| cache-ra01.proxy.aol.com |
Now then... whens that report of me coming out???
Take your time, it better be good :)
and put alt-text next time |
| #33 the-nut[136578] |
| ool-182e1a3b.dyn.optonline.net |
| omg brian! 7.5// when i make some tehy is ganna b like 10's |
| #34 LurkerBurger7[136579] |
| ool-182e1a3b.dyn.optonline.net |
| BRIAN!! Its GOLD! |
| #35 the-nut[136580] |
| ool-182e1a3b.dyn.optonline.net |
| acually, i dont think this is the best one ;) |
| #36 Ender[136581] |
| 128.226.4.90 |
| i think the raters are being generous cept of the lack of quality reports now.. |
| #37 FouREvEr[136582] |
| 216.101.114.3 |
| Needs grammatical work, vary sentence length and structure. Remember that yur audience isnt full of idiots, and work from there. Overall, decent report, maybe better games next time, but you presented the action well. |
| #38 Ender[136583] |
| 128.226.4.90 |
| ooop cept = cause |
| #39 SiG.[136584] |
| adsl-34-218-98.bct.bellsouth.net |
I agree with #37.
The balls of (insert metal here) awards are getting annoying.
Your writing skills should develope over time. I'd like to point out ling's first report. |
| #40 blue_hurricane[136585] |
| ool-182d2d19.dyn.optonline.net |
| nice report. i cant somment on the sentences tho b/c i just looked at the pretty pictures :P |
| #41 Sabotage[136590] |
| pool-68-161-56-82.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| o i c #39. No more balls of steel award ;( |
| #42 jimmy[136592] |
| prx3.act.schools.net.au |
GoGo Aussie!!!!!! whooo!!!!!
i thought time was banned. He.
nice gold ;)
-NJ |
| #43 LurkerBurger7[136593] |
| ool-182e1a3b.dyn.optonline.net |
nice gold
|
| #44 celix[136601] |
| h24-84-33-2.vc.shawcable.net |
| nal_raar hiyo |
| #45 SiG.[136619] |
| adsl-34-218-98.bct.bellsouth.net |
The awards thing was kind of cool.. I just find "Balls of steel award" to be stupid.
You're getting really good at this, though :) |
| #46 jimmy[136623] |
| 144.139.221.60 |
Make more!
-NJ |
| #47 Sabotage[136626] |
| pool-68-161-56-82.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| Im workin on one right now 8) |
| #48 Zomb0_[136646] |
| ool-182d2da9.dyn.optonline.net |
Wow i never thought the world would get to see my suckiness. Well back to cs for me. Wow looking at this report i see how bad i am. :D Nice report by the way........
~waiting for sc2~ |
| #49 Sabotage[136649] |
| pool-68-161-56-82.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| Zombo ur not bad. Its just that mick owned. |
| #50 TIMEisnotonYOURSIDE[136660] |
| 12-210-79-86.client.attbi.com |
| Jimmy, you are soooooo out of the LOOP. A genious like me could never be banned. This site would fall to shit without my reports. Better sac up bitch |
| #51 ZerG~LinG[136673] |
| p402-020.ppp.get2net.dk |
| omg 4 ratings on one br. |
| #52 Cowboy_bebop[136674] |
| ool-182d2b38.dyn.optonline.net |
omg I'm in this w00t thx sabotage
I didnt know it was mick, he was really good
See you space cowboy..........
Cowboy_bebop |
| #53 Schwartz Bruter[136685] |
| ool-182e2ecc.dyn.optonline.net |
| nice report with nal_raal owning with guards and devs and blue nearly getting annhilated by rines and tanks, all and all it was a pretty good report |
| #54 BulletproofChimp[136739] |
| ool-182e2ecc.dyn.optonline.net |
| this is the wors and most fucked up report i ever seen dont see the reason sabotage_ was put on the gay lil golden list this is fucknig bull shit sabotage_ dont write this ever again. Im a.k.a andrew kan bitch. |
| #55 Airplane_steel[136752] |
| dialup-209.246.83.69.Dial1.NewYork1.Level3.net |
| u suck! |
| #56 jimmy[136767] |
| prx3.act.schools.net.au |
BPC, Airplane, leave this site right away please.
This is the sort of report I like to see.
Whatever, TIME.
Hurry up on another one plz plz!
ur cool
-NJ |
| #57 the-nut[136773] |
| ool-182e1a3b.dyn.optonline.net |
gj brin.'
gold........ mine got a 2...............screw this... i'll start a new one |
| #58 the-nut[136774] |
| ool-182e1a3b.dyn.optonline.net |
| ^_^ |
| #59 TIMEisnotonYOURSIDE[136778] |
| 12-210-79-86.client.attbi.com |
| Jimmy your just a jealous little bitch. Peace nigger |
| #60 Psyonic_Reaver[136801] |
| 2Cust108.tnt1.bend.or.da.uu.net |
I'm sorry but this cant be gold. The writing was choppy and you did it with such monotone.
Example: He did this. He did that. Then this guy did this.
You have to be more excited and for crying out loud get some subtle humor in there!
Like: He did THIS while he did THAT then this moron over here did something stupid that WORKED!
I'd say this report to be a 6...But the nice pictures and graphics make up for it so it is a decent 7.
And for crying out loud I knew you guys won the second I read the title.
"Zerg and Terran own Protoss"
For Crying out loud dont ruin it from the beginning!
|
| #61 Psyonic_Reaver[136802] |
| 2Cust108.tnt1.bend.or.da.uu.net |
Ok I totally am a Hypocrite. I said its not gold but I gave it a 7.
I started out kinda mad but then as I typed out what I thought I realized you did a moderate job. So thus: a 7.
Sorry I totally forgot about that first sentance.
Peace. |
| #62 TIMEisnotonYOURSIDE[136809] |
| 12-210-79-86.client.attbi.com |
| Your such a dumbass Psyonic_Reaver. Please kill yourself |
| #63 jimmy[136817] |
| prx3.act.schools.net.au |
He Psi_Reaver. Go Sabotage!
time, why dont u use your stupidity to kill urself?
-NJ |
| #64 Sabotage[136819] |
| pool-68-161-59-242.ny325.east.verizon.net |
LAST
LST
on mah OWN!! |
| #65 Cowboy_bebop[136824] |
| ool-182d2b38.dyn.optonline.net |
| like no ^_^ |
| #66 Sabotage[136892] |
| pool-68-161-58-14.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| no im last |
| #67 Shadow D'Arc[136911] |
| cache-mtc-aa02.proxy.aol.com |
Nope, me.
Peace,
Shadow D'Arc |
| #68 jimmy[136965] |
| prx3.act.schools.net.au |
Last Sabotage, until u come.
-NJ |
| #69 Sabotage[137008] |
| pool-68-161-58-52.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| correct. im last. |
| #70 jimmy[137117] |
| prx3.act.schools.net.au |
noooo meme
-NJ |
| #71 SAbotage[137160] |
| pool-68-161-57-213.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| . |
| #72 jimmy[137178] |
| prx3.act.schools.net.au |
Whats with the . ?
-NJ |
| #73 Sabotage[137213] |
| pool-68-161-59-61.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| asdf |
| #74 The Commenter from hell ever ever ever[138306] |
| CWPP-p-203-54-206-41.prem.tmns.net.au |
| I HATE WAR3! |
| #75 Sabotage[138593] |
| pool-68-161-57-57.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| April 2, 2003 |
| #76 NotJim[139714] |
| 144.139.221.1 |
| April 21, 2003 |
| #77 Sabotage[139829] |
| pool-68-161-64-46.ny325.east.verizon.net |
aprill 22, 2003
my birthday |
| #78 LurkerBurger7[140774] |
| ool-182e1a3b.dyn.optonline.net |
| I am da true last |
| #79 Sabotage[141858] |
| ool-182e1a3b.dyn.optonline.net |
| last |
| #80 Sabotage[143234] |
| user-uive9fm.dsl.mindspring.com |
| TT omfg suck |
| #81 Shuriken[151823] |
| ool-182e1a3b.dyn.optonline.net |
| sometime Aug 04 |
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