| #1 badme[133798] |
| pcp01773918pcs.norstn01.pa.comcast.net |
| 1st! |
| #2 Sathanas[133800] |
| nchobo01.telenet-ops.be |
Hah, no-life! jk :P
2nd |
| #3 badme[133801] |
| pcp01773918pcs.norstn01.pa.comcast.net |
| My first 1st ever....*sniff* |
| #4 Convider[133805] |
| Toronto-HSE-ppp3662983.sympatico.ca |
| niceeeeeeee |
| #5 LameJoker[133810] |
| ip-209-23-1-180.modem.logical.net |
| If indeed this is original, you are very talented. One thing though- if the marines were able to "harvest" one cell from Tassadar, they would be able to get a million. There is no reason for them to only have one. |
| #6 LameJoker[133812] |
| ip-209-23-1-180.modem.logical.net |
| O ya it doesn't seem finished. |
| #7 LameJoker[133813] |
| ip-209-23-1-180.modem.logical.net |
"United Earth Directory" haha
It would be cool if he ran off and joined the protoss. |
| #8 Decay[133814] |
| 206.10.109.36 |
If you break it down and post it in sections, you wouldn't have the problem with your text running out like that. Just make it into 2 or 3 different reports. Don't make them too short though. Looks nice so far. ;)
~Decay |
| #9 SiG.[133818] |
| adsl-35-0-173.bct.bellsouth.net |
You use commas WAY too much.
It hurt me to read that.
But you can paint pictures and scenes pretty damn well, I have to admit.
Work on your punctuation a little, maybe have a teacher point out where some marks are necessary and others aren't.
Waiting for the next one..
Oh, and btw, don't expect it to be rated.. The raters only come out to play when HOF'ers report fics, otherwise.. T.T |
| #10 endersshadow[133820] |
| ool-182ea1c4.dyn.optonline.net |
| ? Didn't .Praetor do this or something? this doesn't seem too original... |
| #11 Decay[133825] |
| 206.10.109.76 |
It's original. Monty Python did fics about the hybrids, but they were protoss-zerg. Completely different. It's authentic, I'm pretty sure. :/
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| #12 DarkRider[133830] |
| adsl-64-160-21-89.dsl.lsan03.pacbell.net |
not bad at all.
Is there a part 2? |
| #13 Koh-san[133848] |
| pcp02334673pcs.bartlt01.ga.comcast.net |
| Didn't read it all, but the last paragraph had a lot of sentences begin with "he". Spice it up a tiny bit (if only that paragraph). |
| #14 Convider[133867] |
| Toronto-HSE-ppp3662983.sympatico.ca |
either he's stealing it from the web, ir this is original work. If it is... holy SHIT this might be better than phoenix legion!
i think you didn't use <fileread> so it got cut off...
repost the other part... i'd give this a 10 or somerthing...
and commas r fun! |
| #15 ZerG~LinG[133884] |
| p402-117.ppp.get2net.dk |
I read the beginning of it, and so far this is looking damn good.
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| #16 SlaveOne[133886] |
| client-151-198-243-110.qdx-it.com |
Interesting Fan Fic: 10 Pt
Alluding to fudge-packing linkin park album: -1000 pt |
| #17 elvenesque[133890] |
| 138.charlotte-21rh16rt.nc.dial-access.att.net |
| pretty nice...the english needs a bit of work, but you know what you're talking about, even if the words/spelling don't precisely match. the imagery is fantastic. i'm loving it. |
| #18 TIME is not on YOUR SIDE[133895] |
| cache-ra01.proxy.aol.com |
Boo fanfics, BOO! TIME has returned! But not for long because I'm constantly getting the banned message, every single battlereports link I click on seems to have a 25% chance Ill go to the ban page, and I cannot submit any of my reports! I am very sad =(. But don't worry, my triumphant return will occur very soon..mwahahahaahahahahahahah
taste this, comments section!
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hahaha, i own this site now! |
| #19 pop_killer[133896] |
| Toronto-HSE-ppp3757081.sympatico.ca |
oh no
Here is the return of the dumbass |
| #20 pop_killer_killer[133899] |
| 201.arlington-38-39rs.va.dial-access.att.net |
| Which one of you? |
| #21 pop_killer[133900] |
| Toronto-HSE-ppp3757081.sympatico.ca |
TIME is not on your side, idiot.
Me a dumbass??? rofl |
| #22 poop_killer_killer[133902] |
| 87.arlington-43-44rs.va.dial-access.att.net |
| Quote-worthy |
| #23 [img]http://forumpics.phreakers.net/ban.gif[/img][133903] |
| 240.80-202-225.nextgentel.com |
| -__- |
| #24 Decay[133909] |
| 206.10.109.38 |
This comments section is full of genious.
19 failed in his task to break the comments section wtih his line, 22 reminds me of Ralph on the Simpsons (Me fail english? That's unpossible!), and 24, its <'s not ['s. -_-; |
| #25 endersshadow[133910] |
| ool-182ea1c4.dyn.optonline.net |
i just read this thing (took a damn long time :'( ) and its very enjoyable. Maybe a little proofreading next time, as I noticed many spelling errors, but this was incredible work. Hope you put out part 2 soon =].
P.S. pop_killer and co., please do not start this retard argument again. thank you |
| #26 [133913] |
| cache-ra01.proxy.aol.com |
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| #27 Shadow D'Arc[133914] |
| cache-ra01.proxy.aol.com |
Thats disturbing... my current ip is the same as one Time has recently used. Shoot me, plz.
Peace,
Shadow D'Arc |
| #28 endersshadow[133915] |
| ool-182ea1c4.dyn.optonline.net |
| TIME shut up |
| #29 jimmy[133938] |
| CWPP-p-203-54-206-183.prem.tmns.net.au |
"vulture.
vulture-vulture.
vulture-chu?
pika-vulture!!"
Only TIME would say something like that.
-NOTJimmy |
| #30 jimmy[133939] |
| CWPP-p-203-54-206-183.prem.tmns.net.au |
BTW this must be rated.
-NJ |
| #31 the()vermind[134169] |
| p69-236.acedsl.com |
| reminds me of monty pylon's fan fics, you people should read them. |
| #32 jimmy[134431] |
| cvpp-p-144-138-156-42.prem.tmns.net.au |
hmm
-NJ |
| #33 aweome[135087] |
| dodds-ce590.eu.odedodea.edu |
really cool, you might want to check the spelling
im waiting for the next part |
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