| #1 ZerG~LinG[127032] |
| p416-109.ppp.get2net.dk |
| 1st |
| #2 hi[127033] |
| ool-18b8ee8c.dyn.optonline.net |
| 2st |
| #3 ZerG~LinG[127034] |
| p416-109.ppp.get2net.dk |
| Hey this actually look okay, lemme read it now :) |
| #4 HasuN00b[127036] |
| pool-138-89-70-64.mad.east.verizon.net |
| Yeah!!! SC >>> War3. I'ma gonna read it when I come'a back from lunch. |
| #5 Some_God[127039] |
| proxy.ia4.marketscore.com |
| YAY 5th now to read |
| #6 Some_God[127040] |
| proxy.ia4.marketscore.com |
Pretty good for a first... The chart really stole my heart :D
The Black on white (text) really irritated my eyes so i just skipped the fanfic. I didnt really notice any problems. Since this is all from memory i wouldnt tell you to put in pics :D
But you could have at least put a better background... I know i didnt, and i got a low rating :(
Pretty good for a first try... and if your good without pics or background then imagine what it would be like with them ???
5.0
-Some_God |
| #7 Mr.Puddles[127045] |
| netcache-2004.public.lawson.webtv.net |
| I didn't read the fanfic 'cause I don't like them. The battle wasn't that special. Good for a first, but get a better battle. |
| #8 vincible[127049] |
| TANG-TWO-SIXTY-ONE.MIT.EDU |
"If you don't know your opponent, always assume he is a newbie." rofl
Heh, the report was kind of a fun read for some reason. The game wasn't too interesting though--he sounded like a terrible player. Pick a harder-fought battle next time. |
| #9 c.FA)Chill[127051] |
| DU53.N233.ResNet.QueensU.CA |
Taken from www.sclegacy.com:
Dragoon:
[pdrRdy00] I have returned.
[pdrDth00] [death]
[PDrPss00] Unauthorized transmission.
[PDrPss01] Incorrect protocol.
[PDrPss02] *beep beep* Drop your weapon. You have 15 seconds to comply.
- ED-209, Robocop
[PDrPss03] 5,4,3,2,1 *phase shot*
[PDrWht00] Receiving.
[PDrWht01] Awaiting instructions.
[PDrWht02] Transmit.
[PDrWht03] Input command.
[PDrWht04] [Glah'sos]
[PDrWht05] [Cah'karadahs]
[PDrWht06] Make use of me.
[PDrWht07] I am needed.
[PDrYes00] Confirmed.
[PDrYes01] Initiating.
[PDrYes02] [Loch'tide]
[PDrYes03] [Meto'rah]
[PDrYes04] Commencing.
[PDrYes05] [Nagat'soon]
[PDrYes06] For vengeance.
I'm not sure which quote you were referring to, because none of them are close to what you typed. |
| #10 Some_God[127059] |
| proxy.ia3.marketscore.com |
| WOW when you set your mind on something you really find out some stuff eh? |
| #11 HasuN00b[127060] |
| pool-138-89-70-64.mad.east.verizon.net |
Funny writing. Enjoyed the read.
You need someone else to proofread. The writing was good, pulp novel style, just needed some copy editing. Some of the battle descriptions was inconsistant with a few skips. What happened with the spider mines?
The fanfic is good too, needs better whitespacing and paragraphing (separate paragraphs with an empty line). Also a bit more proofreading. I'll probably read it again when I'm bored, and add some more comments. I would dream stuff like that when I first got into broodwar. Scary.
Lack of pictures and graphics didn't bother me too much, I care about content and a good read. The HTML table was a nice touch.
5.5 score .. ignoring the lack of graphics.. a 7 for the writing. |
| #12 HasuN00b[127063] |
| pool-138-89-70-64.mad.east.verizon.net |
I meant to write, 5.5 score CONSIDERING the lack of graphics. :-)
"thank you for playing, please try again." |
| #13 andaca[127065] |
| ool-4353591e.dyn.optonline.net |
| Really, no thnx for the fanfic, normally i enjoy them, but this one seemed just....blah.... |
#14  [127070] |
| pcp660145pcs.prshng01.fl.comcast.net |
The BR was competently written, although it could have used a bit more polish. Especially, the amount of standalone sentences that weren't part of paragraphs broke the flow of reading. You're obviously a capable reporter, so I look forward to seeing what you can do with a better game (this was essentially a cannon-rush without cheese :D ) 6.0 for the BR.
Oh also, please post the BR and fic separately next time.
Cheers,
~CB~ |
| #15 jimmy[127568] |
| 144.139.221.152 |
Hi guys
Thanks for the feedback! I've been offline for a while.
#9 - it was [Cah'karadahs] - I have terrible hearing.
#11 - He didn't put an add-on his machine shop ;).
I know, my opponent was 120% sucky.
Just a few corrections:
- My buildorder, pylon, gate, gate, ASSILIMATOR, pylon, etc.
- I didn't get a scout until his buildings floated away.
In general, thanks for the feedback.
6.0 for my first! WHOOOHOOOO!!!! ;)
- jimmy |
| #16 jimmy[127569] |
| 144.139.221.152 |
Oh, Btw, #11, When I said 'spider thingies' I meant the two goons out of my twin gates.
- jimmy |
| #17 jimmy[127713] |
| CWPP-p-203-54-206-101.prem.tmns.net.au |
Oh c'mon why doesn't anyone comment on this!!! It was awsome!!
(not really)
- jimmy |
| #18 jimmy[135156] |
| 144.139.223.154 |
Last on my own
-NOTJimmy |
| #19 Sabotage[135468] |
| pool-68-161-58-119.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| heh im last. I liked it jim. you shouldn't give up battlreporting yo. |
| #20 jimmy[135858] |
| CWPP-p-203-54-206-126.prem.tmns.net.au |
Last.
Yeah, I know I shouldn't. Im realsin a good one later on.
-NJ |
| #21 SAbotage[136004] |
| pool-68-161-56-18.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| no, ur not last |
| #22 jimmy[136040] |
| prx3.act.schools.net.au |
No Sabotage. I'm Last temporarily.
Btw, that Chinese New Year Report was cool. I did the same thing, locking inside my room and playing War3.
Seriously asking, how do you edit saved screenshots?
-NJ |
| #23 jimmy[136489] |
| prx3.act.schools.net.au |
LAST!
-NJ |
| #24 SAbotage[137215] |
| pool-68-161-59-61.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| hehe yea |
| #25 jimmy[137256] |
| prx3.act.schools.net.au |
hehe Sabotage, gogo im last, you have new report?
-NJ |
| #26 Sabotage[137534] |
| pool-68-161-58-160.ny325.east.verizon.net |
march 11: hell yea new report. hope its 3rd gold. btw,
my secret pleasure of being last in now. |
| #27 jimmy[137902] |
| prx3.act.schools.net.au |
Mine! Yeah, spend time on ur reports.
Last
-NJ |
| #28 Sabotage[139521] |
| pool-68-161-64-46.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| Last |
| #29 NotJim[139688] |
| 144.139.221.1 |
| Last |
| #30 Sabotage[139790] |
| pool-68-161-64-46.ny325.east.verizon.net |
| ic. |
| #31 NotJim[162068] |
| ppp-38-132.grapevine.net.au |
| Nah. |
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