| #1 titans-thesoby[119366] |
| d-207-5-252-62.s-way.com |
| i apolgize in advance for any spelling errors |
| #2 KGP]Dream[119367] |
| lsanca1-ar16-4-47-006-243.lsanca1.elnk.dsl.genuity.net |
| barely ever visit site but first non-author :) |
| #3 KGP]Dream[119368] |
| lsanca1-ar16-4-47-006-243.lsanca1.elnk.dsl.genuity.net |
| btw i say 7 but the ending was kinda brief |
| #4 SatansCookies[119369] |
| cdm-208-30-223-geor.cox-internet.com |
| yer a fag |
| #5 Shadow D'Arc[119370] |
| cdm-208-73-201-sana.cox-internet.com |
5th yo.
Peace,
Shadow D'Arc |
| #6 Dragonsven[119372] |
| s19.dial1.pro.nac.net |
Slayer lost. 1
-Sven |
| #7 titans-thesoby[119373] |
| d-207-5-252-62.s-way.com |
| how about the report? |
| #8 I-8-NY[119374] |
| 12-236-182-192.client.attbi.com |
| 1st....er, 8th |
| #9 Pr0be[119378] |
| 12-221-146-40.client.insightBB.com |
| Nice report titan. Pic-overs were crap tho. Army of fighters?!? Good report, seemed like you got tired of writing at end at just did "guards killed scvs and with no money slayer conceded" What happened to his massive rine army? Good job overall. 7.778 |
| #10 adrenaling[119379] |
| CPE014100005949.cpe.net.cable.rogers.com |
| hmmm... u say u put more time into this THAN other brs huh? well i PARTLY believe u cuz u still have some grammar and spelling (which u already mentioned) errors. |
| #11 titans-thesoby[119380] |
| d-207-5-252-62.s-way.com |
| m&ms got ass raped by guards |
#12  [119381] |
| St-Catherines-ppp112505.sympatico.ca |
"I would know more about them but dag and and resonate won't talk to me so pretty much I know nada."
wtf. I remember Ling told you, kindly, that he had a rep you could see that was good enough to br reported. Him and I then spent about 20 minutes explaining every microscopic tactical/strategic move in the game. Then, you stated you'd brb. 15 minutes later Ling got annoyed and left. 5 minutes after that you reappeared. The Rep ended 5 minutes after your reappearance.
Due to your apparent overwhelming newbieness and your "brb"ing, I personally avoided you for the rest of the day. I did, however, ban you later on from one of my games because Ling wanted to join, to which you responded the following day with: "why the fuck did you ban me from that game idiot."
Finally, I don't remember you ever asking us about the players in question.
Now, I'll read the actual br. It DOES look nice from an early skim :] |
| #13 Sexy^Orangutang[119382] |
| 12-234-99-99.client.attbi.com |
| decent pics, good game, a little below average writing, and i had to scroll across the page to read it. probably will get a 6-7 |
| #14 titans-thesoby[119383] |
| d-207-5-252-62.s-way.com |
| maybe u were AFK |
| #15 titans-thesoby[119384] |
| d-207-5-252-62.s-way.com |
| Plz not a 6 |
| #16 KepowOb[119385] |
| HSE-Montreal-ppp3469070.sympatico.ca |
Its was alright. You seemed to have a lot of pictures of a lot of units just standing around, and not many pics of the actual action.
Your writting needs improvment, but the best way to do that is just write more, there isn't much else you can do. Mind you some people can just write good, and some can't...
When you say you spent more time on this (which I do believe) than your other ones, how much time did you put into it? I'm just curious. |
| #17 titans-thesoby[119386] |
| d-207-5-252-62.s-way.com |
| 1 day and a half |
| #18 [119388] |
| St-Catherines-ppp112505.sympatico.ca |
Not a bad br.
it was too wide, though, and the images didn't show enough action. May I recommend collages consisting of only a few larger images brimming with action instead. Also, try and use a different font on your images . . . red doesn't work too well, either.
The end really surprised me. You really seemed to have gotten tired and decided you just wanted to hand in the br right then and there. Don't summarize the gradual changing of the tides in a game and the final defeat of a player in a single paragraph.
Of course your spelling is terrible - use a spellcheck or something, and proofread your stuff. The rest of your text is . . . alright.
Your alt-text is horrid . . . try and make it funny . . . or something. "fight fight" is not the type of alt text that makes me laugh.
All in all, a decent br. I'd say 6.9. |
| #19 Amoeba_Boy[119389] |
| spider-mtc-ti032.proxy.aol.com |
It may be less then last time, but you still have tons of grammer and spelling errors. I think I found around 7 obvious ones, but pretty good report.
Some tips, get a proof reader, better alt-text, humor, and better pics. Some of them were just hydras and rines standing around, you had one of a lair, Im pretty sure we all know what those look like. Anyway, more action pics. |
| #20 titans-thesoby[119390] |
| d-207-5-252-62.s-way.com |
| I got GOLD !!!!!! |
| #21 ZerG~LinG[119391] |
| p440-095.ppp.get2net.dk |
Hey there, won't even comment on the whole "bm thesoby" thing :P I never have problems with the ppl everyone else hates^^
On the report:
The first thing that strikes me is the amazing width. Anyone with a screen size of 800x600 prolly wont read it. Which is obviously annoying. I'm on 1200x800 or whatever, and I can barely fit it all in there.
Also, better pics are appreciated. Never show HUGE collages of a good defence or whatever. Its ok to make those pics very small, since you can still get a picture of how good the defence is etc.
Your writing still needs improvement, but as was said earlier, its all about practice. (I'm still practicing O_O)
Try to employ a spellchecker, human or machine, it helps either way. And the alt-text was total sucks ...
And as was said earlier, the end was totally rushed, and without a single pic.
All in all around 6-7, I'd go with a small 7 if i was a rater |
| #22 titans-thesoby[119392] |
| d-207-5-252-62.s-way.com |
| BM Thesoby |
| #23 Amoeba_Boy[119393] |
| spider-mtc-ti072.proxy.aol.com |
| to help those spelling errors, you can either write it up on word and spellcheck it, or e mail it to someone before you post it. You could try me (Nuggin0@CS.com) but i dont check my mail a lot, if you do send it to me, put something up on the forum letting me know youve sent it |
| #24 titans-thesoby[119394] |
| d-207-5-252-62.s-way.com |
whats Bm Thesoby mean?
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| #25 Amoeba_Boy[119395] |
| spider-mtc-ti072.proxy.aol.com |
| bad manner, annoying people and being rude are bad manner |
| #26 titans-thesoby[119396] |
| d-207-5-252-62.s-way.com |
| im not BM ppl from my chool are. |
| #27 BigD[119402] |
| px2so.cg.shawcable.net |
| Formatting was a little big, but I liked what I saw. Had alt text, but it was on temple. Still, it'll probably stay at 7. |
| #28 Redemption6[119403] |
| 209-6-250-32.c3-0.lex-ubr2.sbo-lex.ma.cable.rcn.com |
| You and your school can be bm :D. Anyways it took long enuff for u to get a gold :) nice improvement. Your grammar is.....not so great. Lets see, tenses. You screwed up your tenses and said things like "dont" instead of "didnt". Spelling was absolutely terrible. Once you said "jju transfered his probes" which was a pain. Your pics, like my brs, dont show much action :D:D:D but thatz okay. Lastly, you got your clock shit wrong. Generally there are 4 clock locations. 12, 3, 6, and 9. No 7, no 8, no 5 etc. When you talk about an expansion, like the natural at 12:00, you say the "natural at twelve" instead of 1:00. You say the "southeast" or bottomright island, not the 5:00 island. etc. Other then those mistakes, the report was good, and yes this was a gold. |
| #29 sig.[119404] |
| host-216-77-220-119.fll.bellsouth.net |
YEven though you act stupid on the forums.. your reports are gettin better.. your alt-text should be better like.. it doesnt have to do with the pic, it can be funny quotes, interesting facts.. etc. the ending was too abrupt.. you explained some stuff in great detail, and others with just a few words..
you can ask me to proofread your stuff.. i do it for zerg~ling.. ranma050@aol.com if you care.. i proof it and mail it back to you. anyways, good report. |
| #30 Decay[119405] |
| 206.10.109.78 |
Not bad. Definitely better than the last one. :D
Other than spelling and grammar, gj. However, I was annoyed by the fact that you said in the beginning that jju had 'warped in a nexus' when he was actually zerg. O well.
~Decay
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| #31 c.FA)Chill[119406] |
| wc01.ym.rnc.net.cable.rogers.com |
Yes, I was also confused by that.
"Slayers going 2 Barracks quick against Protoss...
Hmmm..." |
| #32 IcE-Inforcer[119407] |
| proxy.ia2.marketscore.com |
This report isnt that bad. Pix were better than the ones in ur other brs. The spelling *mistakes* were very anoying, there is one in the first sentence.
*While*, not well you wait blah blah... |
| #33 Metamucil[119408] |
| CPE014060001930.cpe.net.cable.rogers.com |
did anyone notice how he says jju warped in a nexus?
BUT JJU WAS zerg.....
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| #34 titans-thesoby[119409] |
| d-207-5-252-62.s-way.com |
| gotcha my mkistake |
| #35 Zavael[119411] |
| apt-pipe153-117.apts.ou.edu |
I read, and Slayer is owning, and all of a sudden I see "WINNER: JuJu." I blink, then look at the last paragraph again. Not a single picture of a guardian in sight.
Six, sevenish. |
| #36 apos'trophe[119412] |
| adsl-63-200-53-2.dsl.snfc21.pacbell.net |
I think this should be a six. Doesn't deserve gold, too many spelling/grammar mistakes and a 1 paragraph ending.
"Havn't found a way to say 'fuck you' politely..." |
| #37 Sovereignty[119414] |
| wsip68-15-45-159.ri.ri.cox.net |
| Ouch @ spelling errorrs. Decent report and an average game. You need to work on your graphics a little. Dag had some good suggestions. |
| #38 Sovereignty[119415] |
| wsip68-15-45-159.ri.ri.cox.net |
| Zavael: You can see the corner of a guardian in the very last pic at the bottom left ^^ Hey it's better than nothing..ish.. |
| #39 Moebius[G][119417] |
| client-151-200-161-80.bellatlantic.net |
<titans-thesoby> I got GOLD !!!!!!
The next day....
<Drefsab> I gave this a 6, giving you a nice average of 6.5.
I could see that kinda scenarion happening, I swear! |
| #40 E[X]cess[119425] |
| lc0309.zianet.com |
'But making breakfast was my idea'
OMG, that is good. Humor is thnx.
Despite the slight lack of 'Funny', this was good report. Although scrolling back and forth on my 800x600 was annoying. --a |
| #41 Suicidal Insanity[119428] |
| pD9535D87.dip.t-dialin.net |
| works fine in 1600x1200... however the br.com background repeats then |
| #42 titans the fag OB[119442] |
| mia-this02.firn.edu |
yea this kid is always BRB-ing like a mother
he is also gay
report= 5 to wide, sucky end with no pictures
BAN
|
| #43 vincible[119450] |
| 1Cust140.tnt17.sfo8.da.uu.net |
| Way too wide, making it unreadable to me. |
| #44 IcE-Inforcer[119456] |
| 209.105.210.34 |
Why do people like 42 say BAN. He's getting better give him a break.
If it's too wide just re-adjust your screen width, it's not that hard. Unless you're a lazyass shit, like me :P. |
| #45 Redemption6[119466] |
| 209-6-250-32.c3-0.lex-ubr2.sbo-lex.ma.cable.rcn.com |
| Don't ban him hes improving :D |
| #46 3y_[119469] |
| evrtwa1-ar3-4-65-149-020.evrtwa1.dsl-verizon.net |
| pics were nice, but lazy people can't read the beginning when there is no pics there put more in beginning please |
| #47 E[X]cess[119474] |
| lc0674.zianet.com |
Here's a shout-out to all of the lazyass shits like me and IcE-Inforcer who do not have the motivation to change our screen width...
'Can I get a w00t~ w00t~?!' |
| #48 stonecoldnewbie[119479] |
| c-24-245-66-207.mn.client2.attbi.com |
| lolz |
| #49 DarkRider[119520] |
| 198.134.2.2 |
| 2 fucking wide |
| #50 E[X]cess[119521] |
| lc0104.zianet.com |
| Tally one more for team 'Lazyass shits' ^^'; |
| #51 Titans-Keith[119543] |
| 209.187.114.173 |
Nice job man, this report was a lot better then your last ones, work on those grammer ptobs.
GJ Man |
| #52 n00b[119544] |
| pool-138-89-69-175.mad.east.verizon.net |
I thought it was too wide at first.. And, i'm on 1280x960. I made my IE fonts smaller, and it fit!
About the report. I liked your collages, especially the before/after pictures. It looks like you did spell check, but didn't proof read. So many wrongly used, but correctly spelled words, like "witch" instead of "which" are getting by your spell-checker.
The report read nicely, other than the criticisms given in previous comments; some punctuation problems, like run-on sentences and missing commas not withstanding. You just need some more practice to polish up your language and writing. Remember to try and read all 9+ rated BRs for inspiration.
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| #53 Aixaznkid[119567] |
| adsl-63-199-244-3.dsl.sndg02.pacbell.net |
I thought the whole thing was pretty, good, except:
"Both of these players are my great friends so they were willing to play this battle for me as soon as I asked(lol)."
Righhhhhhhhhtt...
They are Korean Pro gamers and they don't speak english that well. Nor they spend their time playing on b.net. I saw plenty of bses in b.net, some people claiming their was boxer in europe/us east server. I know he wouldn't do that. Even if he played on b.net, they play on asia server.
And "Both of these players are my great friends so they were willing to play this battle for me as soon as I asked(lol)."?
That's Bullshit. I could tell. On the mini-map, I didn't see your floating Command Center. And those two player in ther are Korean Pro gamers, as I already said. It's obvious that the replay was downloaded, so stop bullshiting people. |
| #54 titans-thesoby[119569] |
| d-207-5-252-62.s-way.com |
| u r dumb... I figured everyone would know they werent my friends considering everyone knows they are famous korean players. and i said lol |
| #55 Zeal1590[119570] |
| spider-wg072.proxy.aol.com |
Lol he is dumb, no doubt it was a joke :|
Blabla, im always on too late, everyones said everything, gj,
7
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| #56 [119571] |
| St-Catherines-ppp112538.sympatico.ca |
| Aixaznkid you're an absolute fucking idiot. |
| #57 E[X]cess[119621] |
| lc0106.zianet.com |
LoL, OMG @ Aixaznkid =D
Aix, you = smart, huk ^^'; |
| #58 DarkInferno_IV[119627] |
| host217-36-17-186.in-addr.btopenworld.com |
Point 1: Aixaznkid you are "mentally challenged" i.e a retarded 3 year old. Learn the meaning of the word "JOKE".
Point 2: Titans, what's up with your obsession with newb BC rushes. From what I have seen, that's the ONLY thing you can use properly. |
| #59 Muta[119637] |
| 072.208-38-40-0.interbaun.com |
You kept calling the Zerg extractors assimilators =(
You noob |
| #60 USS Hathaway[119659] |
| ppp-206-170-29-219.wnck11.pacbell.net |
| GJ Aixa. You just gave me a forum post to make :) |
| #61 Desert Demon[119662] |
| user-0c8h1bs.cable.mindspring.com |
| Lol. That'd be funny, Hathway. |
| #62 Born)Slippy[119710] |
| 213.161.167.223 |
| gj Aixa :o |
| #63 Blackace[119711] |
| AC9ABBC3.ipt.aol.com |
| Aixa you truly are retarded, lmfao. |
| #64 titans-thesoby[119831] |
| www.govwentworth.k12.nh.us |
| darkinferno WTF are u saying have i ever even played u? |
| #65 piromaniac10000[120079] |
| 209.187.114.248 |
I can't believe how shitty a player u r thesoby, for the love of god STFU!
by the way, who the fuck was that guy who said your choclate milk was done when i was at your house? ur bro? doesnt matter, u cant win ne games w/o Johns help, so y am i talkin, eh? |
| #66 titans-thesoby[120314] |
| d-207-5-252-62.s-way.com |
| smoking the chiva huh? jesus christ who the fuck r u? |
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