| #1 ground-LOBP-[103691] |
| syr-24-169-68-96.twcny.rr.com |
| "Posture" is not exactly the word I would use to put after "beautiful". |
| #2 stonecoldnewbie[103692] |
| 24.245.64.22 |
| hi |
| #3 stonecoldnewbie[103695] |
| 24.245.64.22 |
"A few minutes later we made love."
i cant jack off to that shit man
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| #4 WarLeaderJustin[103704] |
| adsl-64-166-108-146.dsl.lsan03.pacbell.net |
| You fail to use your descriptions in the right place. Who cares about what the characters SAY.. it's how they have SEX that matters.. |
| #5 Killah![103708] |
| gateway.providentnj.com |
| You people are perverts, get a damn girlfriend. Or better yet get a blow up doll they rarely so no. |
| #6 Squad[103717] |
| h000094c7d4a8.ne.mediaone.net |
' "..." ' ahahaha. =P
i dont like this chapter too much, as i am more into action stuff. but chapter 6 was too short. LENGTH LENGTH LENGTH!!
and posting after a BtN br was dumb, cuz u r gonna get a pretty low rating after a 9 br. =( |
| #7 astante[103727] |
| proxy.westbelt.calltech.com |
| thx gw, keep it up! |
| #8 Koh[103731] |
| h24-76-216-150.va.shawcable.net |
I'm not trying to write a porno ok! I'm trying to right a good book.
I was wondering... is anybody here good at drawing (manga would be nice)? I'm ok, but well... I'm only ok. Anyways, if you want, make a drawing of something in this story, like a charcter, the ship, the village, whatever! If it's good, I'll add it in my next battle report. |
| #9 Sig[103737] |
| host-216-77-212-65.fll.bellsouth.net |
| Omg this is good story.. Make more.. plz.. more.. plz.. I enjoy reading this stuff.. your a good writer.. more more more more more more more more more gosy story |
| #10 WarLeaderJustin[103739] |
| adsl-64-166-108-146.dsl.lsan03.pacbell.net |
| Well, if it doesn't have excessive cursing, pornographic material, or outrageous topics, it is not BR.com worthy. |
| #11 Shadow D'Arc[103741] |
| spider-wl044.proxy.aol.com |
WLJ Quote? .... 6 is not a chapter. 6 is a *** at the end of 5. Other than that, keep it up.
Peace,
Shadow D'Arc |
| #12 [SM]Strega~F[103746] |
| proxy8.senet.com.au |
Strangely enough, I don't think people actually say "Heh" in real life. That's the computer equivalent for somebody chuckling a little.
No, really! Has anybody ever said "Heh" in real life and not sounded like an absolute idiot?!? Try it now. It doesn't sound right. Good work.
Strega |
| #13 Koh[103747] |
| h24-76-216-150.va.shawcable.net |
| I say heh in real life, and it sounds fine. Maybe you're pronouncing it wrong. |
| #14 KillaH![103753] |
| gateway.providentnj.com |
Heh is used all the time in real life.
EXP: Y'all get yuz bottums over heh.
... or heh he said bottum ~Beavis & Butthead
so there. |
| #15 Twip[103772] |
| port-40.gall-ts2.cloh.net |
| People say it all the time, actually.. basically a sarcastic "how amusing/wonderful" type sound (as sarcastic as a grunt can be). |
| #16 [SM]Strega~F[103793] |
| proxy2.senet.com.au |
Hmm, I've never heard it said in real life...
Oh well, I guess that just goes to show that I'm an idiot.
But if anybody uses "Lol" in real life, seek medical attention NOW!
Strega |
| #17 Shadow D'Arc[103794] |
| spider-tp073.proxy.aol.com |
If anybody uses "LOL" in real life, come to me mid-way through basic. I have a 7.62 with your name on it.
Peace,
Shadow D'Arc |
| #18 TerrenMahem[103816] |
| 1Cust157.tnt36.dfw9.da.uu.net |
ok, i resisted on saying shit about this damn series, but
damn! this story sucks so bad. All the events seemed
forced, for gods sake, we hardy know about that girl hes
fucked! i hate this fan fic, im sorry, but ill stick with
a blaze fan fic thank you very much...
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| #19 TerrenMahem[103820] |
| 1Cust147.tnt59.dfw5.da.uu.net |
man, i feel stupid, blaze dosent make fan fic :(. I dont
know why i was thinking of blaze making a fan fic, i guees
i had a brain fart or sometin :P.
What i was talking about was a litz fan fic, you know, the
starcraft tv show? thats hilarious..
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| #20 Koh[103829] |
| h24-76-216-150.va.shawcable.net |
"All the events seemed forced" you say. Please explain to me what the fuck that is supposed to mean. The reason you don't know much about Lily is because I just introduced her.
You seem to be the only one who thinks that about this story, so I can't help to not give a shit about your opinion.
And for fucks sake, learn how to spell Terran!
-Koh
PS. Chapters 7 and 8 should be up tommorrow. |
| #21 Patton1944[103832] |
| spider-tf023.proxy.aol.com |
In keeping with the flow of the comments, I would like to say the following: "Fuckity fuck fuck fucking fucky fuck fucker fuck." That is all.
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| #22 Killah![103952] |
| gateway.providentnj.com |
| I guess its official, patton1944 gives a fuck. In fact he gives several |
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