| #1 Cearas[82326] |
| cache01-e3b.syd.optusnet.com.au |
| lala |
| #2 HKRules[82330] |
| 12.107.65.128 |
| what? |
| #3 HKRules[82331] |
| 12.107.65.128 |
In response to your last statement, yes, I did find it boring.
More fanfic pls, if this BR's caliber is the norm now, I'd rather read fanfic. (does not apply to some individuals, e.g. Breeze) |
| #4 DrAwesome[82337] |
| 208.6.90.4 |
is a guy named eondestroyer in your clan? just wondering ;[
i haven't read this yet but ill get around to it |
| #5 eonms.evil[82339] |
| hsa201.pool023.at101.earthlink.net |
| ur report sux |
| #6 gin[82340] |
| dhcp-163-249.tulane.edu |
| I'll be plain and simple: this shit sucks |
| #7 the()vermind[82351] |
| user-2ivea51.dialup.mindspring.com |
alright people, i will actually say something about this br that is specific. Overall, this report sucks as much as the other br's that have sucked over the last few weeks. You did include sizable detail, the games just sucked, you used no html whatsoever, and there were no pics. Now, for specifics. A) you used too many abbreviations B) game 1 sucked C) game 2 sucked D) mentioning clans are annoying, even if they were true, introductions should have humor E) You need humor F) you use too much slang G) the report is too short H) never describe yourself, and about how "proud" you are I) use paragraphs J) Use correct grammar K) capitalize your letters after the end of a sentence L) At the beggining, don't mention the players until after the intro
Well, that's all i can think of after reading your report for a first time, let me read it a second time, and I'll have much more critisicm Range is 1-4, I give 2-3 |
| #8 badtz_maru[82352] |
| barry-asy-27.rutgers.edu |
haha hk/overmind ..
well pretty good for starters err dont flame 1st timers too much but i hope u get their picture eon |
| #9 Eradicate~Me[82353] |
| spider-mtc-td052.proxy.aol.com |
| I can just see myself getting taught in your class overmind, all I'd get is sheets handed to me ungraded, but with paragraphs upon paragraphs of critisicm covering the page in a big blur containing columns and graphs of pure red pen ink wieghing the paper down to the desk to the point where I can't even lift it up. |
| #10 the()vermind[82360] |
| user-2ivebrg.dialup.mindspring.com |
| lol, you forgot to read the last sentence |
| #11 [-EoN-]-SpyX-[82364] |
| dhcp-60-142-dwc.fccj.cc.fl.us |
| dr.awsome,yes a guy named eondestroyer is in eon |
| #12 IG_Parchandri[82365] |
| 202.180.107.252 |
| This wasn't exactly boring, it was more like incomprehensible. |
| #13 eonthebullet[82366] |
| hil-100-107.Reshall.Berkeley.EDU |
hmmm actually thanx for all the comments though all of them are bad, but nothing is wrong. it was 5 am in the morning but no excuse, i must admit it suck bad, but i didnt' care much about grammer and humor at that hour but if i do report another i will try to make it funnier and better. i am an average gamer, can't compare at all to good players out there, but hey we all have our own little small world. for a guy that have play this game for 1.5 year i think i am pretty decent. but bad responses are good thhing cause u can learn from ur mistake. just like in starcraft, u learn from ur mistakes.
peace out |
| #14 <font color="red">Char4Life</font>[82373] |
| extfw.dcgov.org |
| hmmm...for a first timer i guess it was ok. more html is needed, a few pics here in there. captilization and grammar indeed. your details seem ok, just needed betetr games. i guess at 5am writing br wouldnt be the finest of br. keep practicing and u should do fine. and if i would be in overminds class i would get graded with a score of A-F on each paper. just a range : |
| #15 the()vermind[82376] |
| spider-wk052.proxy.aol.com |
| and then my rating would be a C |
| #16 gin[82379] |
| dhcp-163-249.tulane.edu |
| i love you |
| #17 phoenix[LoD][82404] |
| roc-24-95-209-16.rochester.rr.com |
Not too shabby for a first-timer.
Although you put in some good strategic concepts, you seemed to blow through the desciption of the game fairly quickly. With few details, it's hard to get an understanding of the battle.
Even though you posted this early in the morning, proofreading it would have helped immensly. It's not like it's due or anything; just give it some extra time and reread it to smooth out those grammatical wrinkles. Needs paragraphs and good sentences, too.
I'm not going to tell you that your report sucks because you didn't use any HTML. However, if you want to continue to post reports, it would be a great benefit to you to learn some.
-phoenix[LoD] |
| #18 Dillihole[82414] |
| 1Cust239.tnt11.tacoma.wa.da.uu.net |
| Use the advice given here wisely my son, and read the damn Reporting Guides before trying to do another. |
| #19 puk_gosu[82705] |
| apnc110.216.216.211.in-addr.arpa |
I thought it was fine...yeah, I wish it was a little more detailed (I'm a terran player and I know all to well how early lead can crumble into a fucked up defeat, so I'd like a little more of the details).
Good job.
-Nathan |
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