| #1 WarLeaderJustin[81868] |
| spider-th023.proxy.aol.com |
| First with style. |
| #2 GriFFiN[81869] |
| spider-ti051.proxy.aol.com |
| Bah...2nd non-author |
| #3 badtz_maru[81870] |
| barry-asy-46.rutgers.edu |
dude finally a good fan fict
kinda choppy ending but overall good
btw: add more meds
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| #4 WarLeaderJustin[81875] |
| spider-th023.proxy.aol.com |
<I>"I will not begin by doing a battle report, however, as is customary, but rather something that this site does not have too much of--fictional piece set in the SC universe."</i>
When did you, ah, start writing the intro? |
| #5 Hype[81877] |
| 238-149-237-24.sol-dial.gci.net |
well its the first tiem i've been 5th so owell
peace |
| #6 kindalikeurface[81879] |
| spider-ti054.proxy.aol.com |
lol very good point wlj.
i am kinda getting sick of the whole "fanfics" fad. I mean the thats all that ever gets posted anymore.
alot of people might say or think "well, dumbass lets see you do better" I don't think i care to try. I am just saying i like Battlereports. A fanfic section would be good for people who enjoy them. Just putting in my dos cents.
Peace. |
| #7 <font color="red">Char4Life</font>[81882] |
| extfw.dcgov.org |
| man, sooooo many fanfics, one day someone will start a scfanfics.com, u just wait and see! and that 1 single pic at the end totally blew me away. swooooosh!!!! |
| #8 ...[81883] |
| 24-240-44-88.hsacorp.net |
Good fanfic. Much better than the rest of the crap that's been surfacing lately...
If the raters are in a good move, maybe a gold... |
| #9 testosterone[81887] |
| mkc-65-26-143-252.kc.rr.com |
| how it should be done |
| #10 LupeeNoire[81892] |
| 64.208.152.134 |
How to Tell if its a Good Story (besides the obvious)
-A good mixture of action and dialogue/build-up
-Non essential tidbits meant to humanize the characters
-Paragraph layout: not too length, not too short (with
the exception of dialogue) paragraphs
-Development of character (not too essential in short
stories, though)
I did notice a few spelling errors, but they were all from typing and nothing that would have me stop and wonder what the meaning was.
Overall I'd give it an 8.5. I would say nine but there were a few points in it that I didn't understand, such as when Barnes was reporting to his commanding officer, was he wearing his bulky armor? Maybe that's a flaw in me, though, as I just don't see it (even though it may be more standard in a SC point of view).
Very good interludes between action and developement. It flowed much better than most of my writings. |
| #11 HKRULES[81893] |
| 12.107.65.75 |
I feel like posting something. I will not begin by doing a battle report, however, as is customary, but rather something that this site does not have too much of--fictional piece set in the SC universe
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| #12 HKRULES[81894] |
| 12.107.65.75 |
| WLJ already noticed that? Damn |
| #13 Raider[81899] |
| netgate.exeter.edu |
thx for the feedback guys.
As for WLJ's comment, I know that you are referring to victim's and some other guys' recent fanfic posts, but I am aware of them as well. You see, 10 or so fanfic posts are what I consider to be "not many" on a site that has 2000+ reports. Wouldn't you agree?
Raider |
| #14 (DL)Spam[81902] |
| hst000003162um.kincannon.olemiss.edu |
| REPORT GAMES PLEASE |
| #15 lol[81903] |
| extfw.dcgov.org |
| i consider 10 or so fanfics on a NON fanfics site many. and its more like 30+ fanfics. |
| #16 BUU[81904] |
| ACA109B9.ipt.aol.com |
| thats just recent fan fics.. theres faaar more than that out there.. and personally.. maybe we should all just band together and hunt down however first started this... (.preator i think?) with the fenix chronicles.. that being said, it was a good fanfic, the first one ive read in for ever. Gj, keep it up, mebbe you can get a job writing books for blizz. |
| #17 (DL)Spam[81919] |
| hst000003162um.kincannon.olemiss.edu |
| Phoenix Chronicles. Yes it was good. Everything else has been just cheap facsmilies. I think Drefsab was the only other fanfic writer to put out something original, that is, lesbians =) |
| #18 Black Label[81949] |
| ncnocm04.telenet-ops.be |
Don't forget Monty Pylon. I just can't wait to read the next chapter of his Hybrid chronicle...
Anyway. Very good job Raider, keep it up. You said: "I don't want to spoil it ,but..." If you keep writing like that I'll be waiting for any kind of report you write.
10! 10! 10! |
| #19 Eradicate~Me[82006] |
| spider-wo044.proxy.aol.com |
| thats it I'm writing a fan-fic! |
| #20 SCV~007[82053] |
| t4o957p78.telia.com |
Haha Erad :)
Liked the story, gimme next part gogo. |
| #21 iggy[82233] |
| 191.los-angeles-18-19rs.ca.dial-access.att.net |
| sweeet. 10 allaround. make the ultras have sex next time :/ |
| #22 ThieverIV[82280] |
| spider-wo011.proxy.aol.com |
| Good story. However, it's spelled "damn," not "dam." One problem that only came up a couple times, but at the beginning the one marine says "I'm sick of this stinking hole. Eight-hour shifts and the zerg grow stronger by the hour despite all our efforts!" The part about the zerg getting stronger does not confirm to the type of marines posted in that bunker, they would say something like "Why the hell are we fighting if they just won't die?" |
| #23 thinkboy[86840] |
| h0040100c11a8.ne.mediaone.net |
| Your doing good. i really liked how you gave great detail in the beginning and being able to make me feel that i'm actually in the story. keep it up and i can't wait till its done |
| #24 Losion[102920] |
| 138.227.189.9 |
When comes the second par5t of the story?
eager to read more...
Like this one very mucho |
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