| #1 {ahc}overmind[73688] |
| user-2ivecjd.dialup.mindspring.com |
| cool twist you got here monty pylon, I can't wait to read the next one |
| #2 ][~tao~][[73690] |
| bele175.wuh.wustl.edu |
this is really good stuff. Keep it up!
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| #3 hhhh!![73692] |
| baits-209-73.reshall.umich.edu |
| Nice literature work you have written up here. I usually do not bother to read text-only report, but I would give an exception to this. Though this does not have an intensity of the one that was about you being back-stabbed by your ally, this is still a pretty good stuff. |
| #4 Sexy^Orangutang[73694] |
| spider-ta041.proxy.aol.com |
| hhhh!!! didnt read it, cause it wasn't a report... |
| #5 Sid6.9[73712] |
| 1Cust153.tnt3.tacoma.wa.da.uu.net |
| I really liked this, right up until the end. I don't see why Duran would be in this, although I'm sure you will explain that in the next installment. |
| #6 Sid6.9[73718] |
| 1Cust153.tnt3.tacoma.wa.da.uu.net |
Hey Monty, a suggestion on how you can imporve your fan fic. Why not take some screen shots of the fan fic. They would be fake pics, but they would really add that extra element to the story. Eye candy rules!
Like in this story, you could have had a set-up mock pic of Serov's make shift base before the zerg attacked. Then one with the Zerg attacking and such. Do it like on Stardraft and take screen shots. That would be really cool. |
| #7 Monty Pylon[73744] |
| gateway.Culinary.EDU |
| Sorry Sid6.9 but I don't do screen shots. I do not use them for my real BR's so I have no plans to use them in my fan fic. |
| #8 Sid6.9[73745] |
| 1Cust170.tnt5.tacoma.wa.da.uu.net |
Ahhh okay, tis cool, I still love the stories. Just thought I'd add that just in case you didn't think of it, or was wondering how to get raters to actually rate fan fics. The last couple of fan fics the raters didn't touch with 10 foot poles. But they rate retirement reports, go figure.
I figure though that you don't care for ratings, just as long as people enjoy the work you put out, right? * Sees Monty shaking his head yes * Thought so. |
| #9 ThieverIV[73809] |
| spider-mtc-tf023.proxy.aol.com |
| Much better about not starting all sentances with "the", you did that a lot in the last one. The planet seems strangely like Korhal, but still a good story. |
| #10 -citizenkane-[73980] |
| c209662-a.haywd2.sfba.home.com |
Nice ending.
Much less cliché then episode 1.
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mark gimme rating power gogogo |
#11  [74059] |
| proxy1-external.bremtn1.wa.home.com |
Too damn short!
Damn, I read the last and was like Doh! What happens now!
Blah, you got me in good wiht this one.
Too short though, and lots of minor spelling errors.
I like where I "think" this is going.
-Dr.Z |
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