| #1 s1utty[72314] |
| host-216-76-217-178.dab.bellsouth.net |
once again sorry bout the 1st br
- s1utty |
| #2 Shepherd[72315] |
| res104a-013.rh.rit.edu |
| First non-author |
| #3 Shepherd[72316] |
| res104a-013.rh.rit.edu |
slutty, you have a real potential to become a good battlereporter.
Few comments:
1. More details within the writing, please. Be more descripitive. What you have is very good, but I feel as if you need to add little more.
2. The battle is obviously one-sided in a sense. A battle with even sides and endless slug it out between both sides where there is no obvious winner until the end is a good battle to BR. And Those slug it out. . .should involve a lot of strategy, like movements and twists to benefit their ends.
3. Your humor is good. Especially about the part where zerglings think Scarabs are beach balls. Humor keeps the audience reading on and on.
4. Pictures. Very good pictures, except for first picture of minimap, which looked very distorted, making it hard for people not familar with the map to understand the naunces of the map. Also, I would rather to have more words than pictures. But still, the pictures tell a quite a story. You did a very good job with the pictures.
Nice job, slutty. I give this 7 because this is your first BR, and you made a good effort to make a BR successful. |
| #4 ][~tao~][[72317] |
| bele175.wuh.wustl.edu |
| hey s1utty, u did well on this. I think if u have a nice talent for this stuff. Next time, find a more exciting game and i think u'll be set :-) |
| #5 hawk[72318] |
| 209.128.34.4 |
<i>"After seeing Acty's bo, you all think that zulu32, our toss buddy, has been sittin idle and just patrolling his starting 4 probes all over. Didnt you??! "</I>
YUP I SURE DID!
Your grammar is horrendous, the font didn't work with bold or whatever, the repetoire of the "=/" was GROSS.
I don't think a scarab being a beachball is funny. Try AVOIDING beginning with the damn subject of a sentence every damn sentence... my god.
Use similies and metaphors to enhance reading level, god knows the 12 year olds need it.
byebye newbie
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| #6 Raging~Kakaru[72319] |
| p3EE061C8.dip.t-dialin.net |
sorry that i first said xoom will help :/
obviously they decided to be even gayer than geocities and force now all of their members to redirect through their Xoom member accounts, which wont work if one posts a BR here.
Luckily you saw my second proposal in the channel :=) |
| #7 s1utty[72321] |
| host-216-76-217-178.dab.bellsouth.net |
hawk what u say means nothing to me. you are the biggest fast i have ever met... i think your dad probly taught u your homosexual qualities.hawk make a br and show me how it done plz
- s1utty |
| #8 gchucky[72323] |
| ool-18bd42ec.dyn.optonline.net |
| much better this time around. gj, 7. |
| #9 iamnotdrunk![72324] |
| d141-121-240.home.cgocable.net |
kami not = kamikaze
:)
i'm just being picky =P
anyway, great pics - but some more written details in terms of battle scenes would add to the overall effects
gj on your first br :) beats all my all-text ones |
| #10 willwinforfood[72327] |
| ool-18bd7836.dyn.optonline.net |
| based on my short brs i think this will get a 6. i liked the filters used to make the minimap 3D. gj with images just need a longer game and more detail and you're all set. gj again. |
| #11 DrAwesome[72329] |
| PPP-155-15.va.sprint-hsd.net |
| s1utty sweet BR loved the pics. Sorta one sided game but I know the problem :o[ . Anyways, with the first minimap, u used craquelere like I do, but it works better and is easier to read if you set the number of cracks to zero. Then you keep the 3d but its much easier to read. GJ :o] |
| #12 s1utty[72334] |
| host-216-76-219-134.dab.bellsouth.net |
thanks.. i used to be pretty good with photoshop then i didnt use for a long time, gettinused to it again
- s1utty |
| #13 LuckyNewbie:P[72339] |
| user-33qtoae.dialup.mindspring.com |
Hawk comments on brs? i dun think so. Its that 'guy'. dont listen to him. That scarab as a bechball struck me as funny, but please try and proofread your report. there was a misaligned pic :[ Add borders, write better, youll do better
good for a first br
7.
~LuckyNewbie:P
P.S, what paing prog was that? it made a .jpg surprisingly clear
~LuckyNewbie:P |
| #14 [bad]derek[72344] |
| spider-ti073.proxy.aol.com |
| pics = cool |
| #15 Sexy^Orangutang[72347] |
| spider-tk064.proxy.aol.com |
weeeeeeee there was some lame humor, th beachball thingy was okay tho. bad grammer (worse than mine eek!) like "they were meeted" met!!!! k thats all i had to say
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| #16 s1utty[72348] |
| host-216-76-216-15.dab.bellsouth.net |
i use photoshop .. and my grammer is bad cuz i kinda havent gone to school other than maybe once a month or so since 8th grade :/ i will work on it tho
- s1utty |
| #17 [72351] |
| 168.91.128.28 |
Not bad... game was a little boring
Couple of suggestions:
1) Don't shrink your pics
2) Don't include pics of buildings morphing/warphing.
7
Cheers,
Dref |
#18  [72352] |
| 168.91.128.28 |
ummm, whoops, that was me...
Dref |
| #19 Acty[72355] |
| nas-201-106.rochester.navipath.net |
Some advice, pick longer games that are more even. Gj anyway.
Acty |
| #20 Spuzz[72357] |
| jfsn-02-12.dialup.netins.net |
Nice work, you have a lot of potential.
And I liked the beachball joke :)
Spuzz |
| #21 L2S[72362] |
| dial-164.keokuk.mwci.net |
I thoguht it was a great report.
Gj for your first one.
Like the others said, work on your grammar and slap down some pictures with borders, yada, yada, yada, ect. ect. and you will do better.
I'd give it a 7. |
| #22 L2S[72363] |
| dial-164.keokuk.mwci.net |
Note that I spelled "thought" wrong :)
Peace Out
L2S |
| #23 Napoleic[72367] |
| nas-53-101.vancouver.navipath.net |
Dont be discouraged that was quite good. Most qualms are very minor things, you have the basics down pat. It was a good br. The only major thing is of course game quality. You just have to wait till you get a good one Im afraid.
My guide is not to make a br when I feel like bring, but to just go about my business playing and watching the odd game until you get a really good one that inspires you to br. Then you get your best work done. |
| #24 s1utty[72371] |
| host-216-76-216-25.dab.bellsouth.net |
keke im glad everyone enjoyed this. i appreciate the feedback, and im goin to read all these comments again before i write my next br, wich will be hopefully within a week or so. once again thanks very much for all the positive and helpful feedback
- s1utty |
| #25 willwinforfood[72373] |
| ool-18bd7836.dyn.optonline.net |
| omfg gj s1utty!! wheee gold!! doh now i feel like an ass with my 6 comment. =[[[ |
| #26 bhelliom[72377] |
| ugdsb.on.ca |
mmm sluty not a bad br but the players blew ass:/ kaka neway keep up with the good work just find some betta games :o)
BHeLL
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| #27 eriador[72381] |
| port59.msx12-tro.ppp.cybercity.no |
acty sucks?
I really think "the game sucked ass" is more appropriate, mr #26
eri |
#28  [72390] |
| HNW0511.RESNET-STUDENT.UPENN.EDU |
not bad
try picking a better battle next time =] |
| #29 Activus[72547] |
| nas-200-216.rochester.navipath.net |
Bhelliom, 1on1 next time you are on for saying I suck.
Bye |
| #30 you-dirty-whore[73240] |
| 209-079-070-251.ocde.k12.ca.us |
| man that br was crap. i oculd barely read through the misspelled words and the hideous grammer. i totally agree with hawk. you should kill yourself. |
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