| #1 JawaAvenger[56554] |
| d6-22.hntnny.optonline.net |
| First! |
| #2 JawaAvenger[56556] |
| d6-22.hntnny.optonline.net |
| Hmmm... Seems unrealistic at best. |
| #3 Sonneillon[56558] |
| tsdlsk01d01010115.sk.sympatico.ca |
LOL! I hope this was meant to be like sarcastically silly. "The posse of Three." LOL! A zergling, marine and zealot.
Sad how this silly assed report is going to get a really low mark.
By the look of it though, you had fun writing it though, and that's what counts to me.
-Sonny Bouy |
| #4 Deranged~SCV[56560] |
| ci991207-b.edgewd1.ky.home.com |
| Hmmmm....I thought I gave enough explanations as to why their together....maybe not. HOLY CRUD!!! I POSTED IT AND THEIR ARE ALREADY 3 #$%# COMMENTS!!! You guys have no life. |
| #5 MourningWood[56563] |
| fw8.intuit.com |
I kind of like this (in a strange sort of way). I was a bit skeptical after reading chapter 0, but this one seems to be going somewhere. I look forward to reading the next chapter(s). I'm wondering if maybe these three lowly beings will somehow unite the terran/protoss/zerg races (hah!). The theme to this should be "Can't we all just get along?".
MourningWood |
| #6 WarLeaderJustin[56564] |
| spider-tr011.proxy.aol.com |
Enjoy your comments, Deranged. As soon as this thing get's rated, because it's in the "Other" section, it will be fogetton pretty quickly.
Now I go read it. |
| #7 Deranged~SCV[56567] |
| ci991207-b.edgewd1.ky.home.com |
MW:Thats a theme I plan to incourperate.
GOOD LUCK< SELF!!! |
| #8 CynicalMagician[56568] |
| px2cl.gv.wave.shaw.ca |
I would say that you need to develope characters a bit more before you start hurling them at each other. Also, proofreading would help.
-CM |
| #9 Sonneillon[56570] |
| tsdlsk01d01010115.sk.sympatico.ca |
< Begin rant >
LOL! Perhaps you should speak for yourself and not assume about other people when you say, "no life." That has to be the funniest, lamest and oldest online sayings. Funny how silly people keep repeating it to make themselves feel happy/better or something.
You see, I'm at home today, and not at work/outside/playing paintball with friends and such/etc etc because I just had a little bit of surgery on my left big toe. That means I am going to be indoors most of today. (And I was out till 4 last night hobbling around with my posse). So, a person checking here occasionally (about once every 4 hours) means they have no life? LOL! That is one of the stupidest things I have ever heard. I love it when people make such sweeping judgements. It just makes that person look pretty damned silly.
< /End rant >
-Sonny Bouy |
| #10 SqueakyMonkey[56577] |
| osh1-7a4.twcny.rr.com |
| Sonny, you play paintball? Sweet, paintball is the greatest sport ever invented. I was browsing the comments, I need to read this now, brb. |
| #11 Squeaky[56581] |
| osh1-7a4.twcny.rr.com |
Ok, back with my official ruling (I may not be a prospective rater, but I'd like to be next time you elect a few more, so I figure I'll start now). There were a few spelling errors, nothing major.
The characters didn't seem to be very well developed, and it may have helped if a few of their friends lived long enough to help out (perhaps a sassy medic, eh? Eh?), but that's my opinion.
The chapters were a little on the short side, but if you continue to post them in groups of chapters, then that's ok.
5 or a 6, leaning towards a 6. |
| #12 Squeaky (again)[56583] |
| osh1-7a4.twcny.rr.com |
That was very odd, was it just me, or did this report disappear from the reports section for a few minutes. Johnny, Mark?
I think I need to lay off the crack. |
| #13 .High+Templar.[56598] |
| 207-172-176-204.s458.tnt1.hck.nj.dialup.rcn.com |
| lol... |
| #14 Deranged~SCV[56607] |
| ci991207-b.edgewd1.ky.home.com |
| Ok. I will take all your adivce. Thanks. |
| #15 Spermy Joe[56643] |
| ppp96.c5300-1.day-oh.siscom.net |
Lowtax - No, she learn fast! For example, we say "Myiama, you no climb tree! It near power lines!" so we put her in Box of Trial with wires and wood pole and kick box around say "See what happens when you climb tree near power lines? Play it smart, for a God's sake!" She never climb in this tree since!
Lowtax - Fast results, works well on pets too!
Colleen - What?!! That is terrible!! You train your pets that way also?!
Lowtax - Yes, we have doberman pincher, we get for security! We train it to attack burglars, so we get picture of buglar and burglar doll and put it in box with dog, we then kick box around and shove it and flip it over and shout "ATTACK ENEMY BURGLAR, PINCEE, ATTACK AND INJURY!" and my wife flips lights on and off and makes ghosts noises. Dog does not enjoy ghost noises either, so it learns that in dark with burglar, it should be attacking! Very angry afterwords, not a good thing if we in room!
Colleen - I don't think ANY of this is responsible parenting at all and as a dog lover I find that to be REPREHENSIBLE! Have you any idea what your doing?
Lowtax - Yes, throw dogs and child into box!!! We teach lessons of life with box and noises of ghost! Miss Colleen, I have MUCH experience, good thing! I knows what I do!
Colleen - I dont think you HAVE ANY idea!
Lowtax - I spend many years learning optimal teaching, you dont know what you are talking about! I don't know what you talk of, but you simply are vile, YAH!
Colleen - FIRST OFF, you don't know me at ALL, so dont you DARE call me names! SECOND I could report you for animal and EVEN CHILD abuse, so DONT YOU DARE.
Lowtax - Oh no, EVEN CHILD ABUSE! That is worse than ODD CHILD abuse, yes?
Lowtax - HA HA, I make joke on English! I am kidding you, Mister Colleen! YAH!
Lowtax - Sounds like maybe you need time in "Sissy Box", because you are acting like sissy!
Colleen - Your parenting techniques are REPREHENSIBLE and make me SICK!!!
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| #16 wangsonn[56653] |
| fcs01gsp.gsp.bellsouth.net |
| wtf joe?? |
| #17 SqueakyMonkey[56669] |
| osh1-76e.twcny.rr.com |
It's a SomethingAwful ICQ prank called "The Smart Box." Top notch copy+pasting skills there, Joe.
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| #18 WarLeaderJustin[56686] |
| spider-ti031.proxy.aol.com |
THIS IS SO FREAKING GOSU!
This report:
<font size="15"><font color="yellow">150%</font></font>
Drefsab:
<font size="15"><font color="yellow">300% |
| #19 Scrode[56689] |
| users2.xorchicago.com |
| interesting concept...proof your stuff though. Run it through a spell checker. |
| #20 jeezumcrow[56823] |
| svweba03.statestreet.com |
| nice effort, but maybe add some funky humor to make it more entertaining :) |
| #21 Frozen~SCV[56876] |
| slip-32-100-234-71.ca.us.prserv.net |
| Hi Deranged... |
#22  [56901] |
| proxy.tirol.chello.at |
oh and btw i dont like fan fic
and i hate bad fan fic
nm me tho |
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