| #1 The-Relic[54883] |
| cacheflow4.sasknet.sk.ca |
| omg first |
| #2 The-Relic[54884] |
| cacheflow4.sasknet.sk.ca |
| diint even read the thing..sorry, :) |
| #3 :+:SlipKnoT:+:[54888] |
| bc-kam-a53-02-66.look.ca |
| Ya 1st non :O |
| #4 :+:SlipKnoT:+:[54889] |
| bc-kam-a53-02-66.look.ca |
| Nm you were not the author..... |
| #5 [LoR]-Napoleic[54893] |
| 24.66.179.206.bc.wave.home.com |
| ... |
| #6 Dialtone_[54904] |
| athe530-p126.otenet.gr |
| I didnt read through the whole thing just the first one but i'd say you got something here.Very desciptive and well written.My opinion is with images this would be 9 material. Keep up the gw and submit more. |
| #7 SlingsNArrows[54915] |
| bgm-24-95-150-230.stny.rr.com |
| Very very long. I enjoyed it lots at first. A little less the second game. And the third... very little. This could simply be my limited attention span. First one was great though, it was an 8 imho. Downhill from there. |
| #8 Flisk[54920] |
| CWIP-T-007-p-219-72.tmns.net.au |
Holy mother of God this was big.
It looks like you thought this through. Pretty good report on all accounts.
A little harsh on people with small attention span, but a very good read.
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| #9 BW-sux[54924] |
| spider-tm054.proxy.aol.com |
Some good games there, and transferred to "paper" well, except for the fact that a few paragraphs were REALLY long.
7
BW-sux |
| #10 GRB[54927] |
| q.ssl.berkeley.edu |
Indeed, these are some of your best work. However, as you know, I'm a firm believer in html and pics. If you added in some good pics and html, I think this would be a very good report. Pretty sure I said the same thing the first time you posted them.
-GRB |
| #11 The..Scarab[54929] |
| AC80F862.ipt.aol.com |
Yeah, nice writing, but , i dunno, some pics always seem to help with me. Find a way to get the audience to want to read through it, cause i guarantee you, there was plenty of people out there who probly didnt even read it cause it was all text. But like i said, nice writing. Just make it a little more presentable.
-The..Scarab |
| #12 CynicalMagician[54932] |
| px1cl.gv.wave.shaw.ca |
I think this was an excellent report in it's own regard, without pics/html, but I must agree with -sux that some of the paragraphs were very long. It was well written though, I liked the wording/flow. Some grammar errors, and a few lines that I was unsure of what you meant (ie, how did terran lose the last game due to his choke?), but this is still the best text only report we've seen since Dag's a while ago.
-CM |
| #13 jeezumcrow[54934] |
| svweba02.statestreet.com |
Are u fragola or =tang= prechance? or do you know them :) i think they are in the lor clan or something.
Anyhow, as one of the commentors said, the first game was good, the 2nd was okay and the 3rd was was little okay hehe, i think it is because the paragraphs were too long, so the reading was sometimes difficult.
Games were all very good, especially proven grounds, that map always seems to end in late games with all bases mined out :)
Um cat and mice was pretty funny but i think you should try to split up the paragraphs to make it an easier read.
great br anyhow :)
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| #14 The-Relic[54939] |
| cacheflow4.sasknet.sk.ca |
| Ive read some realllly awsome all-text reports, and if the writer can be descriptive and you can follow along, they an be some of the best reports youll ever read. |
| #15 Dr.Zchivago[54941] |
| box2.trfb.navy.mil |
Very good stuff Napoleic.
I enjoyed them the first time I saw them and did so again, here.
I understand that you pretty much just copied and pasted them. They look unchanged whatsoever as to how I first saw them.
Just remember, no pictures doesn't mean you can't skip HTML entirely. Think of how awesome these reports woulda/coulda been with a little <b>Bold</b>, <i>italics</i>, and/or <font color="yellow">colored</font> <font color="blue">text</font>.
And paragraph composition is a must.
But you have very good writing skills as far as content goes =)
Do another! I am sure you will get more input! =)
Just don't stop.
-Dr.Z |
| #16 [LoR]-Napoleic[54946] |
| 24.66.179.206.bc.wave.home.com |
Well this was just an experiment to see how these would stack up to my first br.com report. Of course I understand if you don't want to read them all, I prolly wouldn't ;)
And I purposefully left out html, because it was an experiment. I put less time into these 3 reports combined than I did into that one. So far I seem to be getting better feedback, except for my infamous paragraphs ;) |
| #17 jeezumcrow[54947] |
| svwebw03.statestreet.com |
| got their handles in my bots database, napoleic do u know [lor]-valkyrie and [lor]-stealthtg? |
| #18 [LoR]-Napoleic[54952] |
| 24.66.179.206.bc.wave.home.com |
| Yup, they are fellow LoR's. In fact, [LoR]-Valkyrae is featured in my last br, as he tries to unseat our reigning champion, Curly. |
| #19 jeezumcrow[54953] |
| svwebw03.statestreet.com |
| really, ill go check it out then |
| #20 [LoR]-Napoleic[55019] |
| 24.66.179.206.bc.wave.home.com |
Hmm the whole point of posting these was to compare reactions with them to my other report. Could I get some posts evaluating this please? Could the rater who gave this a 7 please step forward and tell me why these are as good as the other one?
Its awfully hard to compare feedback when I barely get any
:( |
| #21 jeezumcrow[55086] |
| svwebw02.statestreet.com |
err i thought we had evaulated it in the above comments
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| #22 Dr.Zchivago[55133] |
| proxy1-external.bremtn1.wa.home.com |
Ok, Napoleic, you want a comparison as to why they both got the same rating. I will do my best...
Your text only report is written well enough so the reader actually sees what is going on. Your first report on this site is written "around" the pics. It relies on the pictures.
Pictures are somewhat a neccessity for really high rated reports, but only because they add to the total presentation. Pics should be extras, bonuses, not the core of the report.
The writing was severely lacking in your first effort.
As you see here, on your text only reports where you had to rely on words alone, you painted a much better "picture".
What next?
Take the writing style from these text only reports, clean up the composition, and then spice it up a little with HTML: background color or pic, font manipulation, and collages of relevant cool looking pics.
Do all that and you are set. =)
Hope that helps some,
-Dr.Z |
| #23 Napoleic[55212] |
| 24.66.179.206.bc.wave.home.com |
| Thanx |
| #24 Napoleic[55214] |
| 24.66.179.206.bc.wave.home.com |
| Thanx |
| #25 GRB[55223] |
| q.ssl.berkeley.edu |
| Right on the nose Dr.Z. |
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