| #1 JFeTT[52801] |
| ro04-204-210-189-182.ce.mediaone.net |
| First...Long..Bah.. |
| #2 $h@dow[52803] |
| pdx-ppp112.pop1.net |
| I'd say what I'm thinking but then I'd get blasted. |
#3  [52809] |
| 1Cust42.tnt14.tco2.da.uu.net |
| Holy paragraph Batman. |
| #4 AzN[52810] |
| spider-to066.proxy.aol.com |
Nice and long.
But you should add more things in it, like a Title would be nice... |
| #5 ovinder[52813] |
| erbium-asy-34.rutgers.edu |
paragraphs are nice.
let me say that twice.
paragraphs are nice. paragraphs are nice. |
| #6 ovinder[52814] |
| erbium-asy-34.rutgers.edu |
| PS: Don't misspell your title. Its "separation", not seperation". |
| #7 Certs[52827] |
| spider-tf014.proxy.aol.com |
| What the fuck is this bullshit you are a loser man you have time to write all that omg... dude your gay. |
| #8 Dark-Berzeker[52863] |
| d14-kt01-ktnr-pdi.attcanada.net.164.194.142.in-addr.arpa |
i don't like flaming people that put all tat hard work into it
but i really like paragraphs not text blocks
otheerwise its fine |
| #9 BW-sux[52868] |
| spider-ta046.proxy.aol.com |
Paragraphs thx gw.
2
BW-sux |
| #10 ~PL~CloudStrife[52875] |
| ci991207-b.edgewd1.ky.home.com |
Holy mother of paragraphs! My eyes hurt....oww.. not....enough....paragraphs.....aaaarrrrgghhhh...
Heres your annoying colorful marquee...
<font color=violet><marquee>Make more Paragraphs!</font></marquee> |
| #11 ++swinger++[52922] |
| html.net |
| yo, i read the first line then scrolled down to the comments |
| #12 Spuzz[53001] |
| jfsn-01-193.dialup.netins.net |
Hey, this was pretty good! :D Neat story--it was real tense when the Overlord had a tentacle around Sanchez's leg!
The lack of paragraphs made it a bit difficult to read, and you need to start a new paragraph when someone begins talking (that got a bit confusing). But overall, great story! Hehe, I can't wait to meet Hatch the psycopath!
:)
Spuzz
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| #13 Spuzz[53002] |
| jfsn-01-193.dialup.netins.net |
P.S. Shup up, Certs.
Spuzz |
| #14 [GoA]~Toaster~[53360] |
| ppp190.169-96-207.hull.mt.videotron.net |
er... sorry for the above
I really liked your story, I just wish you will continue entertaining me for a long while!
and yes, paragraph are fine, but hey! I don't really vare as long as I like the writing! |
| #15 The..Scarab[56784] |
| AC8526D3.ipt.aol.com |
| Dude you fucking plagarizing fagot, go away and be banned. |
| #16 what[72936] |
| AC8F1674.ipt.aol.com |
| <font color="black"><font size=72>asdf |
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