| #1 ePsiStorm[49583] |
| 1Cust234.tnt1.provo.ut.da.uu.net |
I hope you liked it
it took me an hour to make up the story
it is the first Hybird Fiction i have ever seen on this website
PLZ NO FLAMES
ePsiStorm |
| #2 somebody[49585] |
| p128.netwood.net |
it sucked!!!!
i would suck my mama's cock than reading this piece of shit!!!!!!
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| #3 wAr2wIz})FA({[49588] |
| cr12888-a.etob1.on.wave.home.com |
OMFG 'shutup' somebody i thought it was pretty good. Fags like u just come in see theres no pictures and proceed to write shit in comments without reading it.
You've got some potential ePsiStorm, I liked the ending. If you could just expand your ideas more and include more detail it would be much nicer.
<b>--wAr |
| #4 -m00se-[49617] |
| 207-172-89-163.s163.tnt1.abr.md.dialup.rcn.com |
| one word sums it all wup... "gay" |
| #5 probe[49621] |
| 242849hfc131.tampabay.rr.com |
the speach and conversations in this report are really stupid:P
its less than average fan fic...sorry, it just is:(
you need to improve on everything
mostly, descriptiveness.
"And so they did."
"after he got back to the protoss palace" or whatever
no inbetweens? |
| #6 Viper$[49626] |
| spider-tf012.proxy.aol.com |
This story didn't make any sense. I hate to say it but probe is right(ahh! I think I'm dieing save me AHHH!!) you needed to make the story flow better and follow the actual storyline of the games(the hybrids were in stasis cells not eggs)
Terrans own |
| #7 AHH DAMMIT![49652] |
| slip-32-101-120-6.il.us.prserv.net |
| How did this get a 5 and that freakin' awesome Ethel_the_Frog got a 3? Damn. I know it really doesn't matter much with scores this low anyways.. But damn, somebody go back and give that story a 10 just to make me happy =[ |
| #8 TerranTurtle[49687] |
| 207.198.174.13 |
| This was kinda silly. No physical descriptions of the hybrids? Plot inconsistency in the story (the Matriarch should be dead at the time), and my favorite part: "the hybrid popped out of the egg and killed the zealot standing next to it." |
| #9 [49735] |
| 1Cust232.tnt8.lax1.da.uu.net |
| <td width=100% bgcolor="red" text="blue"><font text="digiface">NEED MORE DETAIL</font></td> |
| #10 Net_Wizard[49744] |
| 216.230.139.26 |
| It took you an hour to think of this story? What a fucking idiot... |
| #11 ePsiStorm[49791] |
| 1Cust115.tnt3.provo.ut.da.uu.net |
Gusy chill out
this is my first fiction
i really suck at fic writing
at least one guy deidnt flame me |
| #12 -xdragon-[49842] |
| 209.67.161.34 |
No offence ePsiStorm. You probably put your effort into this and not supposed to get flamed. But I must agree with number #7 comment. I just don't get these rater. How can your post get a higher rating than the much funnier post by Ethel_The_Frog? Not because you write more I hope.
This story is somewhat mediocre. The characters doesn't match. The fact that the matriarch is dead at the time of the incident (should describe the new matriarch if she is new), zeratul wasn't supposed to say what he said in the end just because a small band of protoss was ran over by a much bigger number doesn't mean the whole protoss race cannot defend themselves. Anyway... with lack of the description of the number of the new hybrids and their powers, this is all doesn't deserve a rating higher than the much funnier post down below. |
| #13 -xdragon-[49843] |
| 209.67.161.34 |
| SOMEONE DELETE POST #9 (and this one). |
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